The Splendid Undertow
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Waving hands and feet
Sinking deep
And further more pulled from shore
Vivid salient silence
Overtaking the violence
The liquid array of night consuming day
Aurora dancing aquatic
Waving so symphonic
With that deep
Solient beat
The soundtrack to my sink
Thump
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Thump
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Thump
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May 1, 2008 at 11:49 am
ahhhh … new digs… nice… i don’t know if you will find this a problem or not,, but this theme has a comment box that starts at the end of the sidebar,, which makes it way farther down the page than a lot of people are going to look when they pull up your permalink… just thought id mention it…..
and no thanks on the love drowning thing… it always turns out to be mud and not water at all…..LOL!!
May 1, 2008 at 12:03 pm
I noticed that about the comment box. Looks like more changes are comming…
May 1, 2008 at 1:50 pm
ozymandiaz,
This one and the four before are substantial and exceptional; they almost link in time. Or, is The Splendid Undertow a subtle between-the-lines metaphor of the others? I love the eternal duality of being human and struggling to accept it.
I have a question. I’ve noticed that you don’t use any punctuation, do you find that it aides or gets in the way of the reader?
Thanks, Keith
May 1, 2008 at 3:26 pm
Hi Ozy,
“The Splendid Undertow” is…………SPLENDID….
and love the new layout to your site
May 1, 2008 at 4:41 pm
Aurora dancing aquatic
Waving so symphonic
With that deep
Solient beat
Me likey!
May 1, 2008 at 8:06 pm
Good work! This is really excellent.
May 1, 2008 at 9:19 pm
Salient is one of my favorite words. It brings up such joyous thoughts.
May 2, 2008 at 12:58 am
Aurora dancing aquatic —god you are brilliant. Oz! The theme switching has caught on! Yay
Love it.
May 2, 2008 at 9:25 am
Aurora dancing aquatic
I’m so with Ali on this one.
As always, amazed.
~m
May 2, 2008 at 1:05 pm
I think the reason I don’t use punctuation much is because I am lazy
it realy isn’t much of a conscious decision, though. Its just the way I’ve always written.
curious
I will investigate.